Dear my warm hot pack,
How warm and kind you are to me.
When I'm cold you are always in my pocket.
You heat makes me really soothing.
How kind you are to give your heat.
I feel comfortable when you are in my pocket.
When I don't have you I'm really freezing.
You are very important for me.
But now I'm cold and wonder why.
I carry you around everywhere.
And I was happy about it.
But I didn't bring you today.
That's why I'm cold and also depressed.
I am joyful when you are here.
When I go back to my desk,
I believe that you will be there as I wish.
You are very kind hot pack and want to thank you.
Now I'm done I'll say goodbye!!
With love, Ji yoon.
Ji Yoon,
ReplyDeleteThis is a good ode but you should try to make better use of personifications and metaphors in your ode. Give the heat pack more human qualities and compare it to something else. The presentation with pictures is good.
Hi!
ReplyDeleteIt is a nice ode to your hot pack. Just try to use more descriptive language such as personifications or metaphors. In your ode, hot pack just seems to be an inanimate object. Keep working hard~~
-Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)